Lovingly yours (2)

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Abstracted mind, Actions confined,

Shattered dreams, Smiles & screams,

Intrigued wait, Very distinct trait,

Diminishing hope, Grit to elope.

~ It must’ve been love~ ( By Roxette )

No reason to smile, no hate no guile,

Always a hope, anything to cope,

Mirthful mind, sweetheart very kind,

Desire to live, make others happy & forgive.

For Eugi’s Prompt:
https://amanpan.blog/2023/02/14/moonwashed-weekly-prompt-130-2-14-2023-sweetheart/

For David’s W3:

https://skepticskaddish.com/2023/02/15/w3-prompt-42-weave-written-weekly/

Puente-

The form has three stanzas with the first and third having an equal number of lines and the middle stanza having only one line (title of a song as required in this case) which acts as a bridge (puente)  between the first and third stanza. The first and third stanzas convey a related but different element or feeling, as though they were two adjacent territories. The number of lines in the first and third stanza is the writer’s choice as is the choice of whether to write it in free verse or rhyme.

The center line is delineated by a tilde (~) and has ‘double duty’. It functions as the ending for the last line of the first stanza AND as the beginning for the first line of the third stanza. It shares ownership with these two lines and consequently bridges the first and third stanzas.

Good evening and see you next time

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18 thoughts on “Lovingly yours (2)”

  1. Expressed in your distinct style, a wonderful weave of thoughts with an amazing outcome.
    touching, heartfelt and beautifully expressed J… ✨🤍

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  2. Tanmay Philip – I'm a bit of a nut This is me uncut: My head filled with whimsy And heart filled with poetry I seek out the stories Of my inner self ... I also write web novels
    Tanmay Philip says:

    Ah, it’s been a while since I listened to Roxette. I really liked the rhyme and alliteration in your puente. I have not seen these things being used much so far. The lines are so full of meaning. It took me a while to take it all in. Very well done!

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  3. My sincere thanks. Your idea of bridging two contrast and discreet themes with a common line through this poetic form was what struck me.

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    1. ben Alexander – David Bogomolny was born in Jerusalem to parents who made Aliyah from the USSR in the mid-70's. He grew up in America, and returned to Israel as an adult. He works as a grant writer for the Jewish Agency for Israel. He and his wife and daughter live in Jerusalem.
      ben Alexander says:

      me too 😀

      I’d only tried this form once before (a long while ago), and I was so glad that Tanmay suggested it for the W3 prompt!

      Your poem is simply fantastic, JM <3

      Sincerely,
      David

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      1. Thanks a lot. I liked it all the more because despite poetic technicalities, it’s an experiment of ideas, too.

  5. Eugi – Atlanta Ga – A gander at me – I enjoyed a dedicated career in the insurance industry for over 20 years being rewarded both professionally and personally. Now it’s time for me to follow my dreams by doing things I enjoy…spending time with family, learning, sharing, traveling, writing poetry, and encouraging others to pursue their goals. Welcome to my blog, Moonwashed Musings.
    Eugenia says:

    A beautiful and meaningful piece and excellent use of the Puente form of poetry. I’ve yet to try this form and can’t wait to give it a go.

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      1. Eugi – Atlanta Ga – A gander at me – I enjoyed a dedicated career in the insurance industry for over 20 years being rewarded both professionally and personally. Now it’s time for me to follow my dreams by doing things I enjoy…spending time with family, learning, sharing, traveling, writing poetry, and encouraging others to pursue their goals. Welcome to my blog, Moonwashed Musings.
        Eugenia says:

        My pleasure.

  6. 100 Country Trek – Hello. Nice to meet you. My journey to cover as much of the world as possible began in Costa Rica in 2003. This is a story in itself, but for now I'll tell the short version . On a hike around Manuel Antonio I started chatting with a fellow hiker from Belgium. He told me he had a trip planned to visit Borneo within a few weeks of his return home. He then went on to say he had been to at least fifty different countries. That was when the travel bug bit me. I haven't stopped going since and the journey has been so incredible . It is here that I will share some of the incredible travel experiences .
    100 Country Trek says:

    Thanks for your comments and thoughts. Anita

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  8. ben Alexander – David Bogomolny was born in Jerusalem to parents who made Aliyah from the USSR in the mid-70's. He grew up in America, and returned to Israel as an adult. He works as a grant writer for the Jewish Agency for Israel. He and his wife and daughter live in Jerusalem.
    ben Alexander says:

    J. M. ~ hi! <3

    Just wanna let you know that this week's W3, hosted by the brilliant Kerfe Roig is now live!

    https://skepticskaddish.com/2023/02/22/w3-prompt-43-weave-written-weekly/

    Enjoy 🙂

    ~David

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      1. ben Alexander – David Bogomolny was born in Jerusalem to parents who made Aliyah from the USSR in the mid-70's. He grew up in America, and returned to Israel as an adult. He works as a grant writer for the Jewish Agency for Israel. He and his wife and daughter live in Jerusalem.
        ben Alexander says:

        🤗

  9. ben Alexander – David Bogomolny was born in Jerusalem to parents who made Aliyah from the USSR in the mid-70's. He grew up in America, and returned to Israel as an adult. He works as a grant writer for the Jewish Agency for Israel. He and his wife and daughter live in Jerusalem.
    ben Alexander says:

    Hi, J. M.!

    This week’s W3 prompt, hosted by the sweet and wonderful Selma, is now live 😀

    Enjoy❣️
    David

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